This is a fantastic start. Your Jared really is a hapless loser, but he's far outmatched by the obviously psychotic slacker Chad. He really is a twisted genius. Your dialogue is tight and funny and I've laughed out loud several times. I'm off to see how this road trip from hell goes.
![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
no subject
Date: 2010-07-14 06:56 pm (UTC)